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@@ -4,12 +4,11 @@ Robert's first full-custom rocket, with electronic-deployment.
 
 ## Motivation
 
-Robert has wanted to try out electronic deployment for a while.  He received
-a [PerfectFlite](http://www.perfectflite.com/) 
+Robert had wanted to try out electronic deployment for a while.  After he
+received a [PerfectFlite](http://www.perfectflite.com/) 
 [MAWD](http://www.perfectflite.com/catalog/MAWD.html) commercial recording
-altimeter with dual deployment support as a gift, and this is the rocket 
-designed to make use of it.
-
+altimeter with dual deployment support as a Christmas gift, he designed 
+this rocket to make use of it.  
 
 ## Design Details